Considering Types

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In this post I consider the types of arguments that would best fit my own writing

Best Choices

• Proposal - A proposal argument is one of the better choices for my writing becasue my argument is centered mainly around why America shouldn't have opposed the bank and joined it instead, and I would be offering logical explanations  of why I think the way I do  and why it would benefit the American economy . so in effect I would proposing that if America had did this ....this would happen. 

• Refutation- A refutation is a another good choice since I'm disagreeing with America's way of dealing with the AIIB and I can provide reasons as to why they were wrong and the negative effects that will have for not only economical relations but political ones as well.

Not The Best Choices

• Position- A position argument wouldn't be the best choice becasue my position is already known and it's not that different from other positions so it would be just like other basic arguments. It also wouldn't offer like ways it could be better or the impacts of the issue. 

• Evaluation- an evaluation argument only focuses on the success of a certain solution to an issue and I don't necessarily agree with how America is handling the current issue and feel they could do something else that would be more effective. 

• Casual- A casual argument is fine but it's not a strong as refutation or proposal and wouldn't get all of my specific points that i feel are important across to the audience. It would only be a general summary of my opinion. 

Reflection: 

From reading Hunter and Lia's rhetorical action plan  and their considering  types  post, (Lia , Hunter)  My plans almost shifted a bit when in Lia's post of her considering types pointed out that it's probably;y not a good idea to do a proposal argument when you're not really all that knowledgeable about the topic, however I still think it's okay and will probably;y end up doing it , unless I find that I really can't.

My Rhetorical Action Plan

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In this post I plot out my plan for my argument

Audience :

In my argument I'm trying to persuade young college students , preferably new to the economic major to understand my perspective and opinion about the AIIB Controversy.

• Knowledge- The audience may  know the bare minimum about this controversy , which is that america had a problem with AIIB and China. but they won't know what exactly for or what the AIIB is used for . They may have opinions that strictly side with America that might need addressing so as to broaden their view as economists . 
• Values -Other than having strong American values and thinking of the issue from a global political standpoint the audience shouldn't  hold many principles about the situation since they don't know much about it.
• Standards of Argument- The research that will persuade my audience are scholarly sources from economists that are knowledgeable about the economic relations between America, China and the rest of the world. I would translate this research into a very basic and simplified version that anyone could understand including my audience. 
• Visual Elements- My audience might respond to comedic visual elements that relate to the subject but still creates a lighthearted setting so that the reader won't feel overburdened with knowledge .
• Purpose- My audience is reading my argument to expand their understanding of the global economic field, and perhaps further their comprehension to the point where they can make their own predictions about the economic future concerning America. My argument could possibly be sucessful in motivating my audience to at least ponder the future of the American Economy.

Genre:

I'm considering a basic , but extremely casual blog post that honestly showcases my point of view.

for example these posts explain economics but in semi formal ways with a lot of confusing jargon. 1.

and 2. 

• Function- the function of using a blog post is because it's  designed to be more like a conversation between two people rather than just giving someone a page of information to look through. I think it'll be easy to read through for the audience. 
• Setting- I could see it being used online in a class discussion or even as a quick reference for a student's  research 
• Appeals-I would use logos and ethos in my appeal by using factual evidence and proof from researchers with credibility and standing within the economic field. 
• Visual Elements-I would use comedic images to keep the overall feel of the argument lighthearted and casual so it is easily digestible for the reader 
• Style-I would be extremely casual and not use mind-numbing jargon that would tire the readers out

Another genre I would consider using would be an article in a campus newspaper or magazine.  some brief example would be something similar to this  or this one  which are virtually the same.

• Function- the function of using a campus magazine or newspaper is because it is directly pinpointed towards college students and will make the reader feel as if it  is exclusive information for them
• Setting-I could see it being used as a casual guide for expanding their knowledge on the subject 
• Appeals- I would again use logos and ethos to appeal to my audience by utilizing research and opinions from credible sources 
• Visual Elements-I would still use comedic images to keep the feel of the argument lighthearted
• Style-I would still be casual as to not overwhelm my audience with information

Positive Actions

1. My audience wholeheartedly agrees with my argument and adds even more information and reason as to why I'm right
2. My audience understand the argument , agrees with it but can now do their own research to further predict what will happen in the coming future
3. Whether they agree or not it motivates and inspires my reader to pursue research in the economic field to find their own answer to problems dealing with the global economy

Negative Rebuttals

1. They agree with America's side and provide evidence of the " social and environmental" safeguards the U.S government listed as caution against China. In return I'll provide the benefits of the AIIB and the overall positive effect it'll have on the global economy
2. They could disagree with the benefits of the AIIB and provide evidence that it wouldn't work out the way economists are hoping and I would then have to dig up evidence of China's history of becoming an economic powerhouse in a few short years and proving that the likelihood of failure with so many countries backing it is possible but won't be allowed to happen.
3. They could also disagree about America making a mistake in not joining the AIIB and list reasons why it was a good thing they didn't join, and i would have to display America's footholds in the Asian market in general and explain why joining the AIIB would have helped.

Analyzing purpose

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In this post I analyze my purpose for writing my argument



The goal of  my public argument is to state that America missed out on a good economic opportunity to join China's bank seemingly because of the government's pride and unwillingness to relinquish the illusion of control.  As a result of my argument I would like for the audience to agree and realize the almost childishness of America's decision.

Plausible Reactions

• The audience agrees and moves on with their lives
• The audience disagrees and moves on with their lives as well
• From the audience who disagrees they provide accurate information that refutes my argument
• Readers will be able to draw several beneficial conclusions and even  intresting economical predictions  from my analysis about the economic future of The U.S and the world overall

Not Plausible Reactions

• The audience disagrees so completely that they riot
• The audience agrees so completely that they riot
• The conclusions the readers draw from argument are a bunch of crazy conspiracies so bizarre that it creates a mass hysteria about the future of the world as we know it (still a bit plausible though)

Likely Consequences

A likely effect from the readers drawing beneficial conclusions will be that my audience will not only understand completely my simplistic approach of this argument but will be able to predict the economical social, and even political  results of  America not joining the AIIB and how it will impact the market economy and the value of the U.S  dollar , hopefully, if they're that smart.

My Audience , specified 

The audience that would achieve my goal would most likely be college students in the economic field. Because they are new to the field and don't understand the impacts and intricate detailing that involves global economics once they read my argument they'll not only comprehend what i'm saying but be able to draw conclusions from it that benefits their research for their major as well as the economic field as a whole.

Analyzing Context

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In this post I answer questions about the context of the issue I chose.

• What are the key perspectives on the debate you're studying?:  The key perspectives in my debate are between the American perspective of disapproving the AIIB and the perspective from China who created the AIIB for beneficial purposes despite the U.S's opposition. 

• What are the major points of disagreements?: The U.S stated before that they had concerns about transparency and social and environmental safeguards within the AIIB, as stated by NPR . As well as the underlying point of disagreement would be that the U.S government felt threatened about a new international financial institution coming into play as stated by the Huffington Post . 

• What are the possible points of agreement?: Overall most economists say the AIIB will be beneficial for the overall global economy and that not only will help with developing Asian countries but it will eventually help the global market . which is elaborated more in The N.Y Times article. 

• What are the ideological differences between the perspectives?: The ideological differences between the perspectives is that the U.S is looking at it from a  traditional political standpoint, of not wanting their influence to be taken away while economists and China are seeing it more from an economical and financial view that will benefit the overall global structure  

• What specific actions do their perspectives or texts ask their audience to take?:  From the economic perspective , the texts ask the audience to understand the benefits the AIIB will have on the overall economy such as in the NY article used above .from the U.S political position it asks the audience to understand the caution the government has with the AIIB by listing the reasons why America disapproves. 

• What perspectives are useful in supporting your own arguments about the issue? why?: The perspectives from China and the economist who agreed with the AIIB's development are helpful in supporting my argument because it provides the benefits the AIIB will have on the overall good of the economy. and why I personally think America missed out on a great opportunity. 

• What perspectives do you think will be the greatest threat to  your argument? why?: If there were more details and arguments about the reasons why America was cautious about the AIIB then it would prove a threat to my argument since it would be proof of why it wasn't a good idea.

Reflection: In  reading Joy and Bailey's posts they both had clear perspectives from both sides of their controversy and  I realized that my controversy lacks a bit from America's perspective. Even though I'm on the other side I'll need to do a bit more research into the reasons the government stated about  why they opposed it so I can frame my own argument better.

Audience and Genre

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In this post I identify my intended audience, genre and a bunch of other things

My intended audience would be......

• young business people working in economic fields in America interested in East Asian economic news and ventures who  would want to be informed in a professional way about what's going on in the economic sphere and how it relates to their businesses.
• college students just starting  in the Economic major ,interested in East Asia who aren't as knowledgeable about economic news and the money relations between China and the U.S and who would want to be informed but not bored or overwhelmed by a lot of terms

Locations and Genres 

• for young business people a casual  economic magazine article, or a classy economic journal of opinions , facts and news
• for college students a quick interesting blog or an intresting and informative YouTube video

Examples

• For young business people:     
• Magazines :This one ,   That one ,     
• Journals:  this   and   that

• College Students : 
• Blogs: This , That, 
• YouTube Videos: This one, and That one 

Extended Annotated Bibliography

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In this post I present my annotated bib of new sources


THIS

Narrowing my Focus

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In this post I narrow down my 15 questions to a few

• What will the American  government contribute to the AIIB to benefit themselves?

The U.S government after , disapproving the AIIB decided that it will work with the AIIB through the World Bank and International Monetary fund , and I think it's important to know  how they will help and if China will even need America's help?

• What are the benefits other countries will receive from  joining the AIIB?

A lot of the media covered America's opposition against the bank but there wasn't  really any word from what the other countries who joined the AIIB thought and how it would help them by becoming one of the founding members

• What are the new developments the AIIB will start or have already started working on? 

China stated that the bank will basically serve as a crutch for countries that need economic improvement on their infrastructure so it's common to want to know who the first candidate will be. 

Questions about Controversy

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In this post I ask questions about my chosen controversy which is the Asian Infrastructure Investment Bank and why it is initially a really good thing for the global economy as a whole .

Who

•  Who is going to receive the funds from the AIIB?
• Why was Japan initially against it?
•  Which of the founding countries of the AIIB are going to benefit from it the most other than the East Asian countries?

What

• What will the American government be contributing to the AIIB
• Will Japan contribute anything?
• What are the first plans the money will be used for?

When

• When (If they have)  did the AIIB fund the first plan
• When (if they have) did Japan contribute
• When (again if) did whoever receive the funds improve 

Where

• Where in China will the AIIB help improve?
• In General where in East Asia will the AIIB improve on?
• Where in the rest of the world will this have an immediate impact on the economy?

How

• How did the general public react to it's development on social media?
• How did the scholarly sources defend  America's initial disapproval?
• How did the general news publicize it's development , in a positive way , negative way, appalled, shocked, horrified , admiring way? 

Reflection on Project 2

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In this post  I answer  questions about my revision process

• What was specifically revised?

In my essay the introduction and conclusion were revised as well as the content of my body paragraphs so the the essay as a whole would flow better as well as easier to comprehend for the audience reading it. 

• How did you reconsider your thesis or organization?

I reconsider my organization by adding more transition words between paragraphs , hoping that it would make the essay flow better between the analysis and the instructions for the audience. 

• What led to those changes?

The peer review and my own thoughts about the flow of essay led to those changes as well as wondering if my audience would ultimately understand where I was coming from.

• How do those changes affect my credibility as an author?

I guess because I couldn't catch those mistakes the first time it makes me seem less credible however now that I changed them it ups my credibility becasue I attempted to make the words flow better and make the content relate to my audience .

• How will these changes better address the audience or venue?

The changes address the audience better by explicitly including them within the analysis of the public argument and explaining each step and why.

• How did you reconsider sentence structure and style?

I reconsidered sentence structure by attempting to add more transition words  and  I reconsidered style by  attempting to be more casual in the beginning and end to connect with my  audience and a little bit more formal when instructing them on constructing an analysis.

• How will these changes assist your audience in understanding your purpose?

I think they'll assist my audience in understanding my purpose because rather  than being formal throughout and  possibly boring them , I try to catch their attention and relate to them through a more casual tone.

• Did you have to reconsider  the  conventions of the particular genre in which you are writing?

No, actually I knew how I wanted to write the essay as soon as I understood the genre. As soon as I understood the genre I didn't have to reconsider the conventions I just had to figure out a way to  get the audience to understand.

• How does  the process of reflection help you reconsider your identity as a writer?

It makes me think that I could pay attention more to what i'm writing , and by that it means consider my audience a bit more ,since usually I write without thinking of  the person who is going to read it or who it is written for. I usually just think that becasue it's my grade it's written for myself. 

Reflection:  From reading Chris and Bailey's post  I learned that almost everyone had trouble with addressing the audience because of the option of explicitly talking to them in the essay was a strange concept for everyone. It was relieving to know that it wasn't just me , and that in other areas , like being clearer or elaborating more wasn't just an individual problem either. Overall , looking back at my own writing,  I think I did fairly good job.

Project 2

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I'm done with project 2 .


.............................................and here it is

Project 2

Punctuation part 2

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In this post , I once again go over the things I didn't know about punctuation.

The Apostrophe 

Although I think I have a pretty good handle on apostrophes, sometimes, when I write really fast and don't read over it ,  I mix up  's and s' . Rules for Writer explains when to use which  . For example  's shows possession  such as Mary's hat .While  s'  shows joint possession  like ; The employees' paycheck. I guess I never really paid attention becasue my main focus will always just be content rather than technicalities, but it won't hurt to go over my essay and check for correct apostrophe use. 

Quotations

I was pretty sure I had a  lock on quotations , I knew when to use them and how .  however there were certain cases that I didn't know about.  Such as using quotation marks to emphasize words used as words  and  not using quotation mark for a long quote .

Other Punctuation Marks 

In this section of Rules for writers it goes over what other punctuation can be used . I try not to stray from what I know so it was intresting learning what other marks I cold use in my essay. For example  using dashes to emphasize something rather than comas.  such as  the example used in Rules for Writers , Everything that went wrong -from the peeping tom at her window last night  to my head on collision today-we blamed on our move.

In regards to apostrophes I seemed to use them correctly even though I wasn't  fully aware of when and how. for example 

The tone  in Fifield's writing elicits somber emotions by drawing up powerful images the audience can accurately visualize

With quotations I used quotes to emphasize the title of the article I used in my essay but it seemed unnecessary since some readers could consider it a quote so I thought Italicizing would be better.

“ In North Korea’s growing economy-and America’s misconceptions about it”the author  addresses the ineffectiveness of the sanctions placed on the  communist country’s economy.

Paragraph Analysis 2

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In this post I wearily  analyze my strengths and weakness of my essay (Even though I'd rather be at McDonalds ordering chicken mcnugggests or some other form of McHappiness )


In my paragraph analysis  I noticed that I explained myself pretty well in my paragraphs including why I chose a certain example and what it offers to the strategies used. I could be more explicit about the affects of these certain examples to the audience and why they would persuade someone. I also noticed that whenever I mixed the analysis of my text with addressing my audience it didn't flow well together so I'll have to fix that too.  My strengths would be using a lot of words to mask what I lack , and also providing useful explanations, My weakness would be  transitioning and not  going into minute detail.

Revised Conclusion

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In this post I revise the end of my essay

I feel like this conclusion answers the question of so what better  than the first . It also goes into detail of the of what the author's strategies will ultimately do for the intended audience. I also feel like it relate  back to the target rhetorical audience as well, because  they will ultimately understand that I know their struggles and where they are coming from.

New

The author of this text informs and gently persuades her readers to agree with her viewpoint of America's delusions about the strength of the sanctions placed on the North Korean country by  drawing on the audience's emotions .  Through these strategies Fifield opens the eyes of her American readers , and confirms  to her audience that the government may not always know what they're doing or acknowledge the  consequences  of their actions. I don't want to say this is a perfect conclusion but this should meet the requirements.  It doesn't have to  be covered in unicorn glitter and angel sparkles to  catch the eyes of a superficial reader (although it can) , It just has to ,simply,  make sense and give the  reader the perception that you as a writer know what you're talking about even if you honestly don't.

Old 

Through investigative journalism Fifield disproves the American belief of their hold on the North Korean economy and effectively sways the audience to agree with her stance mainly through the use of strong emotional appeals. As a rhetorical analysis for a public argument this much should suffice, as a writer and a college student being able to observe and argue the points of your own analysis , requires not only labeling the strategies used but also being able to provide answers for the patronizing questions of why and how for your readers.

Revised Introduction

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In this post I redo my introduction


In this introduction I feel like I go into more detail. Although I personally like both of them I feel as if this one includes my rhetorical audience into the essay even more than the first one did. I also think  it explains the background of text a bit more as well.

New

You have been placed into an unfortunate situation, not as unfortunate as student loans , or as miserable as a final exam with one question, no, you have to write a rhetorical analysis on a public argument and you have no idea how to go about doing that.  The main point  of this daunting task is to make sure you understand how to locate the strategies used by the author that  sway the readers to their side.  In Anna Fifield's article the investigative journalist sheds light on the misconceptions the American government has about the North Korean Economy.  She uncovers the factories operating on the border of  China and North Korea  that produce  goods under the guise of  "made in China"  products .  The author minimizes the effectiveness of the sanctions placed on the country by evoking feelings of sympathy and disapproval in her audience by applying  a dismal  tone, explicit narratives, and personal stories from people involved.

Old 

Unfortunately, University students have to analyze everything: people, ideas, public arguments etc , seemingly for no reason at all except  to confirm to  higher-ups that you can actually comprehend whatever is going on around you.  In rhetorical analysis of public arguments, specifically,  the goal is to use what you've observed and accurately pinpoint  the strategies an author, or whoever, used to sway their audience to their side of the debate.For example, in  Fifield's article, the author covers the illegal North Korean factories being operated in China despite the sanctions against the communist country. In a successful effort  to minimize the effectiveness of the sanctions and inform her audience of the misconceptions about the economy ; the author evokes sympathy and disapproval within her readers through the use of dreary tone, thought provoking narratives, and interviews from the citizens involved.

Reflection on project 2 draft

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I revised Austin and Mathias's drafts  and in this post I solemnly reflect and ponder on my own misguided  attempt of an essay.



Identifiable Thesis?  I don't use pathos logos or ethos in my thesis and it's identifiable because it lists which strategies i'm going to analyze in my essay.

Organize Essay?  I decided to organize my essay in an.....odd way.   I addressed my audience first and then went into my rhetorical analysis and continued that pattern by writing my analysis and then explaining it to my audience.  However each  paragraph addresses a point and then goes on to explain it in the other sentences.

Rhetorical Strategies?  I don't know about several important rhetorical elements but I did analyze the ones I thought were important and made the most impact within the text. Although I didn't  analyze the structure or the context within the text was written in . Which I'm going to have to go back to do because I feel like it offers more of an explanation and chance for analyzing .

Why Rhetorical Strategies were used?  I feel like I did explain why my rhetorical strategies were used and in regards to my fictional audience I even went as far as explaining why I chose to use those strategies for my analysis as well. However I could go into more detail when explaining why I wrote what I wrote in case my readers misinterpret something .


Evidence?  I did use evidence in the paragraphs containing my analysis of the text . Although I could go into more detail in explaining  why this particular example is the best choice for a particular strategy.

The Reader? I don't think I leave the reader wanting more , only because as a reader myself , whenever I read any essay I've never wanted  more. However I do think I answer the question of so what , as it pertains to my own rhetorical audience and why they should care about this.

Punctuation , Part 1

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In this post I write about my newly enlightened knowledge of punctuation .

Unnecessary Commas,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,

To be honest I did not know such a thing was possible . I thought all commas were necessary. I thought whenever there was two independent clauses a comma was needed and also whenever but was used as well. In relation to my essay it makes me think of how many commas i'm going to have to delete from every sentence that could be technically deemed as unnecessary.

Semi Colon  ;?

I'e always been a bit unsure if I should be using a semi-colon or not so I usually just put  a in a comma to avoid using it .  ( hence unnecessary commas.)  So I liked how the book broke it down and actually specified  which instance I should use a semi colon. and now I have to go back over my essay for that. 

Colon:

If I didn't know about the semi colon than I should be honest and say I didn't really understand when to use the colon either. I just avoided it. but it's nice to know when I should use it and the book definitely provided answers for that.  Also I've been , apparently, using it wrong by putting it before a list of things so I may have to change that in my essay.

Reflection :  What I learned about my three topics are that most people have a handle on their punctuation use. I think it's just me that's confused. However I did find a few mistakes similar to mine  from reading Mathias's and Austin's drafts.

In  Mathias's draft he puts a common before and which, as it turns out isn't exactly needed like I thought it was.  "Before analyzing Soble’s article it is important to have a basic understanding of the article’s content, and the context of the controversy it involves."

In Austin's draft  , it wasn't really a comma issue it was more of the fact that he didn't need the first word or the comma in this sentence becasue it would read fine without them. "Now, the sentences you have read above are an example of an introduction. It is important to have a strong first sentence in order to draw in the audience shortly followed by a thesis."

Draft of Rhetorical Analysis

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In this post I basically explain my decisions in my draft essay.

To be completely honest I do not know if what I wrote makes sense at all, but that's how i feel generally about most situations. I also decided to take out trying to explain the credibility aspect of the essay becasue I felt  that the emotional appeal was a lot stronger argument.

I'm pretty sure it doesn't flow well either so ....yeah .  Any feedback is good feedback.... unless it's rude.

Here it is .

Practicing Summary and Paraphrase

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In this post I attempt to paraphrase a quote from my text without  summarizing and summarize my text without paraphrasing .

Original Source

Operated by North Koreans, the factories produce clothes and other goods that are exported under foreign-company labels, making it impossible to tell that they have been made with North Korean hands and have contributed to North Korean profits.  The thriving operations belie the perception in Washington that U.S. and international sanctions are working to strangle North Korea’s ability to make money. While an overwhelming majority of North Koreans live in poverty, the country’s output has been steadily increasing, and an estimate by South Korea’s Hyundai Research Institute forecasts that the North’s economy will grow this year by a whopping 7 percent.

Paraphrase 

 In Fifield's article, North Korea's growing economy-and America's misconceptions about it she generally argue, that even though sanctions have been placed on North Korea , the regime's economy still continues to grow because the citizens find other ways to funnel money into the government. One of the ways the country continues to make a profit is through the use of disguised factories  in China that are being ran by  North Koreans.

Summary 

Although America believes that the sanctions have  handicapped the North Korean economy, there are disguised factories being ran by the citizens that still funnel money into the government resulting in the  general boost of the country's economy.

Project 2 Outline

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In this post , I wearily and without much desire to do so, write not only the outline for this tedious essay but also write out my thoughts on the cautious guidance  given to me by a PDF file .

In "Introduction" it helped me cut down on sentences that were mostly background of the text and focus more on the strategies used  instead. I had a hard time in figuring out how to write it without summarizing but it helped me realize the true goal of my essay without accidentally deviating from the actual purpose . which is why I thought to kind of address my audience before diving into the essay. In "Thesis"  I generally assumed the thesis was just the last line in the introduction and didn't think too much about it but the reading helped me break it down into different questions for myself as the author and for the audience , who are the readers.  With "Develop" and "Support" I appreciated the advice for making sure my claims are debatable and supportable and that the evidence I used should not only make sense but coincide with my claims so the audience can understand it for themselves. In " Body" it cleared up the actual organization of my thoughts. I was unsure of which parts of my text to use because there are so many options and it makes it hard to decide where I should focus my argument on. However with the numbered list in the reading it simplifies the process of picking how I should organize it by separating it into the focus , evidence and conclusion.  In the subsection " Conclusion" it cautioned me against just restating my thesis or just summarizing what i wrote but  instead implies i should focus on why I wrote my argument , why I chose a certain side and why it should matter.

Intro:
Unfortunately, University students have to analyze everything: people, ideas, public arguments etc , seemingly for no reason at all ,  to confirm to  higher-ups that you can actually comprehend whatever is going on around you.  In rhetorical analysis of public arguments, specifically,  the goal is to use what you've observed and accurately pinpoint  the strategies an author, or whoever, used  to sway their audience to their side of the debate.

Thesis:
For example, in  Fifield's article, the author covers the illegal North Korean factories being operated in China despite the sanctions against the communist country. In a sucessful effort  to minimize the effectiveness of the sanctions and inform her audience of the misconceptions about the economy ; the author evokes sympathy and disapproval within her readers through the use of dreary tone, image provoking narratives, and interviews from the citizens involved.

Body:

• focus on the tone of the text and how it would persuade an audience , as well as why it was important to pick out the tone for a pathos angle
• focus on the narratives why they would sway an audience , and why it was important to observe this strategy for a pathos angle
• Focus on the interviews , not only focus on the pathos angle but the credibility that is included with it and adds to the  persuasive argument why it's important to acknowledge both pathos and Credibility for this particular observation

Analytical Claims:

• The text Fifield wrote points out the  uselessness of the sanctions as well as the little knowledge The American government and the public have on the affects of the sanctions  and highlights  one of the ways North Korea can get by them. can be supported through the quotes from the texts as well as the interviews from the citizens.
• Fifield influences her audience to agree with her opinion successfully mainly through the use of an emotional appeal as well as credibility. can be supported through techniques used such as tone ,narrative, and interviews.

Conclusion:

 Through investigative journalism Fifield disproves the American belief of their hold on the North Korean economy and effectively sways the audience to agree with her stance mainly through the use of strong emotional appeals. As  a  rhetorical analysis for a public argument this much should suffice, as a writer and a college student being able to observe and argue the points of your own analysis , requires not only labeling the strategies used but also being able to provide answers for the patronizing questions of why and how for your readers.

Reflection: From reading Bailey and Jovanka's posts I found it interesting that everyone was interpreting the project and outlining their essay for their rhetorical situation in their own way. and the first instinct as a new college student is to panic becasue usually in high school everyone's essay is pretty much uniform , and if yours is different than it's most likely wrong,  but becasue this is left to everyone's own interpretation it's easier to see  examples of  other options in writing this essay. Overall I think they did a good job in outlining their essay and as for revising this project it just opens my eyes to other ideas for approaching the rhetorical situation.

Draft Thesis Statement

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In this post I draft thesis statements that could be used for my essay.

• In Fifield's article , the author successfully  navigates the reader through the hidden business operations being practiced on the border between China and North Korea in a sucessful attempt to showcase not only the misconceptions America has on the North Korean economy but  to also minimize the actual effectiveness of  the sanctions. Fifield's techniques stem from evoking sympathy and disapproval  from her readers through the use of tone , word choice, and the image provoking narratives from the citizens involved.

• The author of "North Korea's growing economy and America's Misconceptions about it"  utilizes  somber tone and word choice as well as factual narratives from interviewed citizens  to dredge up powerful images of illegal businesses being ran by North Koreans in Dandong China. Fifield influences her audience to agree with the inadequacy of the sanctions placed on North Korea and approaches her argument with the purpose of  informing the general public of the sanctions  affects.

• As an example of rhetorical analysis of a public argument I'll use Fifield's piece on the  North Korean factories being operated in Dandong China despite the sanctions placed on the communist regime. In the article  the author's use of  despondent tone and word choice, and the high use of personal accounts from actual people involve, effortlessly generates emotions of sympathy and contempt within her audience , all for the purpose of  gently guiding her readers to agree with her sentiments about the uselessness of the sanctions placed on North Korea.

After writing the thesis over and over for my essay I do have a general idea of how I would like to organize everything in my essay , and how I want to address my audience and convey the instructions to them as well. . Although each thesis ,in my opinion , is  pretty lengthy I'm leaning more towards the third  and second one because of the detail in them. However i'm pretty sure  i'm going to end up using a combination of all the three to get my essay started.

Reflection: After reading Michaela and Mathias's blog post  I felt more confident at the three I worte. I felt like both Michaela and Mathias had a  really solid thesis for their essay. Although both were a bit lengthy , which is a common problem for all of ours I think that once we polish up are respective statements  and clean up the wording that it'll be fine.

Analyzing my Audience

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In this post I'll be analyzing the audience who are students new to my major.

• Who Am I Writing for? The audience I'm writing for are new students in the economics major . They are not well informed on writing rhetorical analysis for public speech and need guidance in  that respective area.

• What position might they take on this issue? How do I respond? On the current  issue of the text i'm writing about, the majority of the  audience might agree with the author about the ineffectiveness of the sanctions against  North Korea.  However for the few that would disagree I would respond with why and would want  them to provide evidence of their argument. 

• What will they want to know? The audience would want to know the impact the factories would have on the North Korean economy, as well as on the Chinese economy , and also if it impacts any other countries, or international conglomerates.

• How might they react to my argument? They might react by agreeing with my argument and even adding more information to it or they might try to disapprove it with  their own evidence and opinions about it.  (even though no one asked for their opinion)

• How am I trying to relate to or connect with my audience? I am trying to relate to my audience by simplifying the process of rhetorical analysis and comparing  it to something that they can easily digest and be able to not only comprehend but also so they can analyze different texts for themselves in an adequate fashion. 

• Are there specific words ,ideas, or modes of presentation that will help me relate to them? Although traditionally formal words would be more professional , I think having a combination of a casual tone with formal wording would help them relate more and be able to comprehend it as well. 

Reflection : I read Austin and Carrie Belle's post and it only confirmed that everyone is going with different concepts in their essay.  There were differences between all of our posts, whether it was how we are addressing our audience or which part of our essay our imaginary audience was going to react too. Either way I learned that whatever I'm doing isn't wrong and that I also may be somewhere in the direction of the right track when it comes to writing this strange essay,  that's half instruction manual and half rhetorical analysis.

Cluster of " North Korea's growing economy-and America's Misconceptions about it"

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In my cluster I tried to actually organize it this time. The right side are the  values, beliefs, and ideology used in the text.  The left side is the  rhetorical situation and the bottom purple parts are the rhetorical strategies used by the author.

Analyzing Rhetorical Strategies in " North Korea's growing economy-and America's misconceptions about it.

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In this blog post I answer a bunch of questions , again. related to the North Korea's growing economy article.

Credibility or Character?

• The author heavily uses references to credible sources through the use of interviews from people involved with the businesses on the border. For example the author cites the words from a North Korean Factory owner " They are here to make money for the country" when he was referring to the workers he oversees.  The author also relies heavily on tone to evoke sympathy and dreariness from the observations in the text,  "  The women work on the third floor , wearing their coats inside to guard against the cold" 
• The author would use these strategies to express their opinions and to  paint a clearer picture of what's going on with North Korean economy after the U.S placed the sanctions on the country so the readers can emphasize and be informed of what is actually happening. 
• These strategies give the Author credibility becasue not only are they expressing an opinion but they are going the extra mile to paint a picture of their opinion by interviewing people involved and drawing from their won observations so the reader knows that they actually do know what they are writing about it. 
• These strategies help the effectiveness of the text by being able to see and hear from the words of people who are there, who are living it, and witnessing it on a daily basis. 
• The author doesn't seem to have any bases becasue they do not out rightly criticize anyone or even offer suggestions to fix the problem. The author seems to know that there isn't much that can be done that hasn't already been done. 

Appeals to Emotion?

• The Author definitely uses emotionally compelling narratives if nothing else to appeal to emotion. For example in describing how sometimes people go missing or commit suicide a businessman states " Sometimes the North Korean takes the money but then you can't find the person. As the middleman I have to take responsibility for that.  There are some people over here who have committed suicide because they've lost everything."  Another strategy the author used is the statistic of people involved in China and North Korea.  " one quarter of the city's population of 800,000 is involved in doing business with North Korea in some way."  as well as  "North Korea is thought to have at least 50,000 workers outside the country earning money for the regime, and 13,000 of them work in Dandong." 
• The emotional responses the  author  is attempting to create from the audience are disapproval , shock, and sympathy. 
• The actual result is sucessful since the author does evoke sympathy for the workers involved , disapproval that the governments are using the citizens and shock that the sanctions have only fueled this capitalistic behavior
• I think the emotion is effective in getting the reader interested in wanting to be informed of this particular situation. The readers seem to be of a general audience so this would be effective in getting them to feel a certain kind of way about the businesses be operated in Dandong. 
• Th emotional appeals effect the credibility of the author by making the author seem more involved with the story than by just reporting it. it helps their credibility becasue it seems that they actually care about what they are writing about it. 

Appeals to Logic

• The author uses personal interviews/ interviews from experts  heavily in the text as well statistics  to appeal to logic.  When talking about moving money from across the border into North Korea  a businessman states " So they come in or I go into North Korea to settle the bills. They like to be paid in U.S dollars , euros, Japanese yen." So there's no doubt in the readers mind that it's impossible to commit these acts of business when a businessman states how easy it is.  From a sanctions expert the author quotes them saying  " There is a lot of jumping to conclusions in Washington and discussion about China showing a strong hand to North Korea. I don't see the evidence for that."  The statics used were the ones stated above regarding the number of workers and businessman that are operating in Dandong. 
• The response the Author is trying to elicit from the audience seems to be one of shock and disapproval with the use of logic becasue. Even though the U.S says the sanctions are working and China is being cold to North Korea quite the opposite is happening. 
• The actual result seems to be sucessful because the  majority of the audience  can read and agree that the sanctions aren't working . IT isn't like the author is over exaggerating a claim or trying to scare anyone , it seems to be calm informative conversation of " just so you know..."  between the author and audience. 
• I think these strategies are effective for the audience and rhetorical situation because it explains the content in a digestible way that makes the reader think and make their own assumptions without them being pushed into a corner by the author's opinions.

Reflection: 

From reading Hunter and Olivia's blogs  I realized that the most lacking  strategy in their texts  used was pathos. not because it was under developed just that the topics weren't necessarily emotional topics that a general audience would connect to. Even though my own text wasn't pushing for a strong opinion or anything I do think it appealed to emotion because of the topic involved. North Korea  invokes images of communism and as democratic Americans that will naturally invoke an emotional response especially once you involve underpaid workers and it makes the reader feel bad for them. I feel that my text was analyzed well enough because of the subject , I feel like it appealed to each criteria .

Analyzing Message in " North Korea's growing economy- and America's Misconceptions about it"

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In this post I analyze the text's purpose by using the questions from the Student's Guide

• express an idea or opinion?  Yes-ish. I think the text expresses the idea that : one , everyone needs capitalism even communist countries, and two I also think it  expresses an opinion of what the author feels about America's sanctions and it's effects of the North Korean citizens.

• respond to occasion or text? Yes it's responding to the sanctions that were placed on North Korea's trade that served to only further hinder the economy and the people, and not so much the government as the U.S was probably hoping.

• inform? Yes the main word in the title is " Misconceptions" and the author is informing the audience of something they didn't know: that the made in china goods that are everywhere were technically made in china but by North Korean factories by North Korean workers.

• Analyze?  I think so . becasue not only does it inform the texts brings up interviews and what the author actually observed while at the border between Dandong, China and North Korea.  It goes into detail of who's working at the factories, who's collaborating with factories, what the citizens of China think and why it matters. 

• persuade? No I don't think it's trying to persuade the audience of anything . I think it's to get them informed and make them think.

• reflect? Maybe it's reflecting on the topic of sanctions and the fact that they only spur creative /illegal ways of getting money to the government. 

• advocate? I don't think it's advocating anything either, becasue it's not saying they should stop or we should do something about it rather it's saying " Look. this is what is happening. sanctions aren't doing much. they can't really do much , and how can you tell a country what to do if they're just going to do it anyway?" 

• Move the readers? Sympathy, I don't know about other readers but I personally felt bad for the citizens who were getting paid 300 dollars and only getting 100 of it  for working and sleeping at a factory all year long  to feed their families while the rest of it went back to the government.

Out of all the bulleted points I think the  most important were informing , responding to an occasion and analyzing. These seem to be the author's main goals in the text  becasue of the sheer detail in the text to inform the reader about what is happening after the sanctions have been placed. The ones that weren't relevant were advocate and persuade because I don't think that's the direction the author is going for , advocate and persuade would be to get the readers to do something. and there's really nothing anyone can do . I don't think there are any underlying messages the author is trying to get across because it's all kind of straight forward it's not hinting at what anyone should be doing or even suggesting an alternative action that the government could use if anything she's just expressing her opinion with a few facts to go along with it. 

Analyzing my own Assumptions

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•  Cultures or Values we share?  The only cultural values I share within the text  are the values of capitalism . Technically since North Korea is a communist country they aren't supposed to be capitalistic but from the text we see that they have begun a  capitalistic ventures which from an American standpoint,  the way they are going about it is still kind of wrong but at least the citizens are making "some money" which is an ideal that America is based on : The citizens  making their own money , legally or illegally. 

• Cultures or Values We do not Share? obviously America  does not support communist values as the North Korean citizens nor do I support the unfairness of workers being paid so little while working so much even though huge U.S corporations might. Actually the government wouldn't support anything in this article at all since North Korea is supposed to be sanctioned. The social values we don't share is the mindset of "let's do it for our government." if anything America is the opposite and it's more of a " let's do it for ourselves."  kind of mentality. Because Although I can appreciate the freedoms of living in American society I can also appreciate the freedom of criticizing our government when I want to (all the time) and how I want to . unlike the citizens of North Korea.

• Connect or reflect our own culture? As I said previously the beginnings of the capitalistic mindset that is growing in North Korea is heavily reflected in our own culture . Everything we wear, eat ,and see is made from capitalism . What doesn't reflect back to our own culture is again that  " for the regime" mindset that as American citizens we were bred to disagree with. 

• In a different time period?  The text isn't written from a different historical perspective rather it's written now in a time period where America and North Korea are not on friendly terms whatsoever. Which adds to the extreme differences between the two cultures becasue not only are they polar opposites but they are polar opposites that dislike each other. 

Reflection:  After reading Stef and Jovanka's blog I realized that some people feel very strongly about their text and have strong opinions about what it's related to. about whether they think somethings right or wrong or if they disagree completely with the author of the text.  I didn't have a strong opinion about mine per se. I thought , and still think,  it's interesting , and I think it would make a great documentary or even action movie called  " Dandong Border"  and it also made me (still does) want to be a shady businessman and make money becasue i'm poor . but after thinking about it  I do think it's wrong that they are  not paying the workers a lot , and I think it's rude that America's sanctions aren't doing too much other than hurting the citizens instead of hurting the government. 

Analyzing My Text's cultural setting

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In this post I analyze the text's cultural setting and answer questions that relate the text to it.
This article was written in March of this year and the author actually went to the border of North Korea and China where the factories are happening so she could interview the people there.

• What values, ideas laws etc. play an important role in the text?  The communist  belief of  " It's for the regime" plays a role in the text . as well as the idea of  a budding  North Korean capitalism and  the shady side of businesses in China as well as the international laws of sanctioning countries.

• Directly or Indirectly? The Text address these values directly through the use of interviews with Chinese businessmen that are working with the north Korean factories, the North Korean factory managers who say it's for their country , and other people who are involved with the businesses that are being ran on the border between China and North Korea. 

• Relationship of text to values and beliefs?  The text serves to emphasize these beliefs and shed light on these values in this text. The author writes to actually show the perspectives of people living and dealing with the businesses being ran on the border. The text even subtly undermines the U.S government . The title states "America's Misconceptions" and sort of undermines the sanctions the U.S placed on North Korea by having proof that although the citizens are poor the government is still having money funneled to them by North Korean factories under the guise of " Made in China" products, thereby subtly stating that the sanctions aren't as effective as America thinks. 

Cultural Analysis of : "North Korea's growing economy-and America's Misconceptions about it"

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In this post I provide a brief cultural analysis of  "North Korea's growing economy-and America's Misconceptions about it"  by finding some keywords (or what I think are keywords) and creating a thesis of the article.

• Cultural Keywords?  1. "made in China" . I think this would be considered a cultural keyword because what a person associates with the words " made in china: is of  cheap goods produced by underpaid and overworked laborers.The author connects the phrase to the main idea of the article because the start of North Korea's capitalism is literally being made in Dandong, China in North Korean ran factories.    2. "Border" could be another keyword in this article. it's repeated about 4 times in the writing. I don's know about internationally but in America the word border is acknowledged as place where illegal things happen and where the government cannot keep watch of all the activities that go on around the border. It; almost like a blind spot. The author uses border repeatedly in the article to create a visual of the ....not quite  so legal operations that happen with this factory and the fact that both the North Korean and Chinese government overlook it.    3. Sanction .  the word sanction is also repeated  3 or four times in the article. the author refers to the sanctions american placed on North Korea that should have hindered it's economy  yet the word sanction is used loosely because North Korea is still finding ways to make money and boost it's economy. regardless of the "sanctions" placed on them. 

• The Thesis: Although  most of America perceives that the sanctions the U.S government  have placed on North Korea have rendered the country  in a financial lock down, The country's citizens have found ways to operate factories in china near the border of North Korea and funnel money back to the North Korea regime.